Critical Investigation: First Draft LR

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WWW "Outstanding research/bibliography. Very effective use of quotes."

EBI "Take care with expression - sometimes keep it simple. Include more explicit reference to representation/feminist theorists (Dyer/Mulvey)"

LR

- "Include explicit references to Mulvey/Berger where possible."
- "More references"
- "Maybe expand on institution"
- "More wider contexts"
- "Could include more effects as the character feels sorry" (?) 
- "Name drop theorists"